Teacher feedback of magazine front cover draft

Rebecca, I like the progress you have made from your mockup to your final product. The first thing I noticed was that the image did not immediately suggested to me the genre you are targeting. I like your use of a strapline to do this, but the image is vital in this respect. It could be a case of simply getting Kayleigh to do some kind of clothes or gesture or carry an object which suggests hip-hop. And while we are talking about tweaks, I would use either some shapes in the back behind your text to make it standout, or alternatively experiment with using drop shadow. Also, your inset images need borders or something to make them stand out from the background image. Overall, a successful product but with some work needed